Critique : Hip Hop Rock Song "Tumbling Down"

Verse 1

Hunger/Chokin every inch of my viens strangled and frozen it pinches/
and singes with pain hopin it ain’t the true lie/ This world aint’ for my/health/it helps me into a grave and ohh I -
see we all slaves to the cakes and the moolah I do not/
Break from now to the last hoo-rah/
This world I’ll take with a pistol gun or two –five or moshburg
Nerves cold as the guts of an iceberg you heard
My words will split an atom in thirds/
Like lasers through him and her and disappear in a blur
As it were we’re busted. Society’s a corrupted/
System and logic’s dumped in a feces bucket/
Panic’s the new functin we burn both sides of the candle
Illogically watch as the economy falls into a shambles/
Human theives Blow-ing a-way like human leaves
like the banker told the joker what do you believe?

Verse 2

Who’d a thunk it?/Wall street’s lustin and mass consumption/
Would have us broke and rusted with muthafuckin nothin’/
The infrastructure has been infiltrated and dusted and no one knows nothing like a mass alien abduction./
Banks in shreds and shards what’s-the-next-to-be gone –com-plex hex-agon you bes’ get cha god to fix it/
At the blink of an instant/
Cause right now we punchin’ shorter than kung -fu midgets
Dig it/
Ain’t no need to explain cause pain’s universal./
So many things have changed 180 degree reversal./
I grew up with hood crooks that look like me./
But now there’s a man in the office that looks like me./
I keep my true wits like two clips beside me /
With a crew too sick don’t give two shit like me/
Watch as your lies fries like vampires in sunrise fuck the top 5
Dead or alive, dog I’m trying to survive.


Verse 3

20, 000 maniacs
20, 000 brainiacs
from the burbs of planet earth to the hous-ing proj-acts
with the soul of a swinging axe deep in my cerebal synapse
I’ll forever well past the human species collapse
You will not define me I break rules in this mug
With the swag of a jail thug covered in blood
Calbro’n my confidence is of a young Roy Jones titanium alloy bones this ain’t a fair fight zone.

Chorus:

It gets dangerous when I come around
Fuck Green lights, I do it now
Nobody move nobody make a sound
when it's rumblin' I bring trouble right now

It gets dangerous when I come around
Fuck Green lights, I do it now
Nobody move nobody make a sound
When it all comes tumbling All comes tumbling down